What i usually see with japanese doujin artists is that they use story as a set up only. The plot never moves foward until the very end and even then, that plot progress is just more set up for a sequel. Its like 1 -2 pages of actual plot, only showing the necessary bits, lots of exposition to move plot points even faster and then boom, boom, boom, its page after page of just sex.
This is what i prefer,but that doesnt mean you cant have a story progressing duing sex. In a lot of character focused doujins like in tiny evil doujin series by muk(check n-hentai) the sex is actually the thing that moves the plot forward cause its used as a device that changes the personality of the main characters. I think you can learn from doujins like that when it comes to mixing story and sex in comics in a meaningful way.
Hope we can get full pages of just fucking and no dialogue. Just panel after panel of penetration and Creampies. Not gonna lie, as much i appreciate the story you’re trying to set up, its beginning to drag the comic to a slow pace. A lot of the panels that show action feel like small teases that demand more attention. We need a big “climatic” pay off. Go all in on the actual hentai.
I totally get you – to be honest I started to get annoyed as well. The only excuse I have is that its my first “big” comic, but there are to much errors that I wouldn’t like to see personally. After getting feedback from different perspectives, I see that it does not work to please everyone. I think I will tell the rest of this comic without too much story and rather change it to something that we are actually all here for.
Feel free to change it, but please don’t do so in a way that would revise what your ultimate intentions are. Unlike Ghostly, the plot is actually has been what’s captivated me the most and I am really eager to see where it all leads.
Oooh. So when evil yen sid left in keyblade graveyard so maleficent planned to control namine waits yen sid to get vulnerable to die by her or kairi like Alex person said.
What this gift maleficent talking about So maleficent needed xion kairi namine aqua and larxene to their slave but kairi somewhat different and seems xion eyes are becoming like kairi and aqua.Hope xion doesn’t get fall to darkness quickly. I guess this was a plot twist this whole time.
Also xion revival will be wait for made up story before d23
Like you said kairi first than xion second wanna see what’s juicy for xion and kairi and whoever is the mysterious person let roxas and izeno. This one really good.
What i usually see with japanese doujin artists is that they use story as a set up only. The plot never moves foward until the very end and even then, that plot progress is just more set up for a sequel. Its like 1 -2 pages of actual plot, only showing the necessary bits, lots of exposition to move plot points even faster and then boom, boom, boom, its page after page of just sex.
This is what i prefer,but that doesnt mean you cant have a story progressing duing sex. In a lot of character focused doujins like in tiny evil doujin series by muk(check n-hentai) the sex is actually the thing that moves the plot forward cause its used as a device that changes the personality of the main characters. I think you can learn from doujins like that when it comes to mixing story and sex in comics in a meaningful way.
Thank you for your feedback, I will look into it for the next time.
Hope we can get full pages of just fucking and no dialogue. Just panel after panel of penetration and Creampies. Not gonna lie, as much i appreciate the story you’re trying to set up, its beginning to drag the comic to a slow pace. A lot of the panels that show action feel like small teases that demand more attention. We need a big “climatic” pay off. Go all in on the actual hentai.
I totally get you – to be honest I started to get annoyed as well. The only excuse I have is that its my first “big” comic, but there are to much errors that I wouldn’t like to see personally. After getting feedback from different perspectives, I see that it does not work to please everyone. I think I will tell the rest of this comic without too much story and rather change it to something that we are actually all here for.
Feel free to change it, but please don’t do so in a way that would revise what your ultimate intentions are. Unlike Ghostly, the plot is actually has been what’s captivated me the most and I am really eager to see where it all leads.
There are plot points that are definitely going to happen, just like the end. Only the way changes a bit, so that I can say that I’m happy with it.
Oooh. So when evil yen sid left in keyblade graveyard so maleficent planned to control namine waits yen sid to get vulnerable to die by her or kairi like Alex person said.
What this gift maleficent talking about So maleficent needed xion kairi namine aqua and larxene to their slave but kairi somewhat different and seems xion eyes are becoming like kairi and aqua.Hope xion doesn’t get fall to darkness quickly. I guess this was a plot twist this whole time.
Also xion revival will be wait for made up story before d23
Like you said kairi first than xion second wanna see what’s juicy for xion and kairi and whoever is the mysterious person let roxas and izeno. This one really good.